Showing posts with label essay. Show all posts
Showing posts with label essay. Show all posts

Tuesday, July 24, 2012

Stand Up to Passive Voice!

To be, or not to be?  Easy!  Not to be!

I know. It brings back junior high school English.  Conjugation! Yikes.

Grit your teeth!  Here's your refresher:

'To Be' ~ the ultimate in passivity!  Bolded here in an ironic twist:

I am
you are
he, she, or it is
we are
you (plural) are
they are

Just get rid of those milk-toasty, shoulder shrugging passive forms!  Save no quarter for was and were, either!

To wit ~
     Beth Ann was hungry and looked in the fridge.
Vs.
     Famished, Beth Ann searched the shelves of the fridge.

Or ~
     Henry and Joe are mad.  They are ready to fight.
Vs.
     Fighting mad, Joe and Henry stood toe-to-toe.

And, not to get too personal ~

                                   Grandpa’s feet are stinky. 
     Vs.
                                   Grandpa’s feet stink.

While we cannot extinguish the nefarious 'state of being' verb, we can shrink its status to that of a pesky flea in line for extermination.

Kill it before it kills your writing!

Make it 'Sweep #1' when you polish your work.  Scan and rewrite to cast off the passive and weave in the active.

And Write, Dream Writers!  Write!